ravenstar
Young at Heart
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Hi all,
It's been a while - almost 6 years, I think - since I last posted anything of substance on here. There's been a lot going on in my world, but I've never given up on writing. I wrote this the other day and thought you might like to read it. I'm toying with the idea of writing a collection of short stories like this for publication, but I'm not sure yet. Anyway, here's my latest naughty story. Hope you enjoy it. Feedback, as always, is welcome.
Raven
*****
Banged by Dr Dennison
Word Count: 6064
Banged by Dr Dennison
I pull up outside the strip mall, which houses the medical practice of Dr Dennison: Family Physician. Dr Dennison has called this his surgery since graduating from medical school in the early 90s. The mall is a two-story brown brick structure housing a few speciality shops, a veterinarian, and a party supply store. Most of the dozen shop fronts stand empty, and the mall, like the rest of my hometown, has a stale, forgotten air hanging over it.
Everything around here seems to be forgotten now. Back when I was six the large paper mill closed. In the blink of an eye, more than half the town was out of work, and it's never recovered. I remember going on school holidays days before the announcement. When we returned to school for the next term, dozens of familiar faces had vanished as if they’d never existed. Mum calls it the exodus. I remember it as when I lost my best friend, Taren, without any warning.
I make sure to set the alarm on my little red Mazda before I head towards a brown door that almost fades into the surrounding brickwork. I wipe my feet on the mat and open the door. Lying directly in front of me is a small, tiled area at the base of a steep staircase. The staircase is covered in an ageing yellow carpet.
I close the door behind me, locking out the unseasonably cold wind and sideways rain and quickly take the stairs two at a time. I’m here for a medical before I move away to university. It’s my father's idea. He decided a medical would ensure any hidden health problems would be detected before I’m hundreds of kilometres away in Melbourne. I can see his point, but he's such an old worry wart. His constant fussing drives me nuts. I’m moving interstate, not to Kabul.
I reach the top of the stairs, slip my phone into my side pocket, and open the door to Dr Dennison's waiting room. A blast of hot air hits me in the face as the door swings open, and a room full of blank faces turns in my direction, like those rotating clown heads you find in a sideshow alley.
Dr Dennison’s been our family physician for as long as I can remember. He’s always looked old to me. I mean, he's probably only in his late 40s, but as a kid, I thought he was the same age as my grandparents. Truth is, he’s probably younger than my parents. It’s the grey hair. He’s always had salt-and-pepper hair.
His waiting room hasn't changed a bit since the early 80s, and it shows. An ugly grey tile floor is covered by a threadbare rug and a coffee table with chipped corners. Utilitarian seating, grey vinyl with heavy black metal frames, line the walls. The reception desk sits directly in front of the door, and the walls are covered in dark stained wood panelling. A TV is mounted on the wall opposite the chairs; the volume turned down to almost non-existent.
'Hi Jonah,' the receptionist says as I walk in. 'He's running a little late today. Take a seat, and he’ll call you when he’s ready.’
‘Thanks, Debbie.’
It's been a while - almost 6 years, I think - since I last posted anything of substance on here. There's been a lot going on in my world, but I've never given up on writing. I wrote this the other day and thought you might like to read it. I'm toying with the idea of writing a collection of short stories like this for publication, but I'm not sure yet. Anyway, here's my latest naughty story. Hope you enjoy it. Feedback, as always, is welcome.
Raven
*****
Banged by Dr Dennison
Word Count: 6064
Banged by Dr Dennison
I pull up outside the strip mall, which houses the medical practice of Dr Dennison: Family Physician. Dr Dennison has called this his surgery since graduating from medical school in the early 90s. The mall is a two-story brown brick structure housing a few speciality shops, a veterinarian, and a party supply store. Most of the dozen shop fronts stand empty, and the mall, like the rest of my hometown, has a stale, forgotten air hanging over it.
Everything around here seems to be forgotten now. Back when I was six the large paper mill closed. In the blink of an eye, more than half the town was out of work, and it's never recovered. I remember going on school holidays days before the announcement. When we returned to school for the next term, dozens of familiar faces had vanished as if they’d never existed. Mum calls it the exodus. I remember it as when I lost my best friend, Taren, without any warning.
I make sure to set the alarm on my little red Mazda before I head towards a brown door that almost fades into the surrounding brickwork. I wipe my feet on the mat and open the door. Lying directly in front of me is a small, tiled area at the base of a steep staircase. The staircase is covered in an ageing yellow carpet.
I close the door behind me, locking out the unseasonably cold wind and sideways rain and quickly take the stairs two at a time. I’m here for a medical before I move away to university. It’s my father's idea. He decided a medical would ensure any hidden health problems would be detected before I’m hundreds of kilometres away in Melbourne. I can see his point, but he's such an old worry wart. His constant fussing drives me nuts. I’m moving interstate, not to Kabul.
I reach the top of the stairs, slip my phone into my side pocket, and open the door to Dr Dennison's waiting room. A blast of hot air hits me in the face as the door swings open, and a room full of blank faces turns in my direction, like those rotating clown heads you find in a sideshow alley.
Dr Dennison’s been our family physician for as long as I can remember. He’s always looked old to me. I mean, he's probably only in his late 40s, but as a kid, I thought he was the same age as my grandparents. Truth is, he’s probably younger than my parents. It’s the grey hair. He’s always had salt-and-pepper hair.
His waiting room hasn't changed a bit since the early 80s, and it shows. An ugly grey tile floor is covered by a threadbare rug and a coffee table with chipped corners. Utilitarian seating, grey vinyl with heavy black metal frames, line the walls. The reception desk sits directly in front of the door, and the walls are covered in dark stained wood panelling. A TV is mounted on the wall opposite the chairs; the volume turned down to almost non-existent.
'Hi Jonah,' the receptionist says as I walk in. 'He's running a little late today. Take a seat, and he’ll call you when he’s ready.’
‘Thanks, Debbie.’










