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[Autolycus]

A nice start, please continue.

 

[Lefty]

You go story writer.

My goodness,

Astory that doesn't have rampant peni dripping with honeyed

nectar while the proud owner manipulates his gleaming pectorals

causing every twink in the....well...you get the idea...good start...

don't go on spring break and leave us at the condo....

 

[Lefty]

Haunted...

A few details before we move our relationship from initiation to the
consummation phase.

Haunted is to much typing..........subject to protest or approval you will
be Lady HaHA or just affectionately as haha.

I am a bastard task master (ask EJ) you want an editor..Don 'Q' is good.
Me, I just mouth off and say what I think works and sucks. It isn't personal,
I am queer for writing..okay,everyone has a fetish.

When I get the urge to modify dialogue or adjust a scene, the writer has me
enthralled.................or at least deeply interested. You Lady HaHa are in that
vicinity at this time.

Your call, should I just fade away or shall I yap and nip and bite, worrying
your prose like a haunch of beef in the kitchen (btw, in case that was too
erm, confusing, I LIKE the story)

 

[Lefty]

Well Lady HaHa...

The Don is not a shred yo editor......he does catch glitches like names that

are misaligned and date out of whack.....His heart is to big to be mean EveR.

Ask Kuli, GSDX..Autolycus.

Me...I read the turmoilt, trauma, drama power and scope...pisspoor with the

details. I appreciate the 'nned' to know people read your stuff, my one lame

story and all the 'poimes' even the silly posts and BioBlog..my juices I need to

have people see and say.

You my dear are doing very well and I will be flagging you to the JUB as

applicable.

 

[WildBeast]

Hi Haunted.

Nice story so far. I don't quite get Ryan and Jesse's relationship so far, but maybe it's intended to make us read between the lines, in which case it is pretty easy to guess. An unlucky appointment for Ryan, if I'm right, but it's usually a good setup for stories.

Another thing I noticed is there's no descritpion whatsoever about what the protagonists look like. Is it intentional to make our imaginations wonder, or it just isn't your thing? Or maybe you want to tell us it doesn't matter. Not that I mind, I like action-packed stories too, as long as it doesn't feel rushed, which it doesn't

I'll keep reading your story.

 

[Lefty]

HaHa.....thats what keeps people reading......

It is considered story developement and is what

makes reading so much more saisfying than film

or even stage. You are doing fine............

a bit slow LOL but otherwise..fine.

 

[Autolycus]

You cannot rush perfection Mister Leftside.

New chapter should be up tomorrow.

I have been enjoying the story so far and look forward to the next episode. Your characters seem real - that is good. As for the silent majority who read and then pass on, you have to accept "No news is good news" for unlike the Almighty, frustrated readers are swift to chide and slow to praise.

I have rated this a five star thread

 

[Lefty]

Well A.

You don't respond sometimes...but this is one we agree on

Damn good...5 stars so far..........and you know...I don't

play the b.s. script.

 

[Autolycus]

Sorry, no chapter today, I've been knocked down with a migraine all day.

Hoping to have something for you guys tomorrow.

You have our sympathy - there is nothing worse. Still it will certainly pay us to be patient. Trust you are soon feeling better.

 

[Lefty]

Oi Haunted,

It is poopoo on a stick time

The masterbarder his Modship Autolycus has

noted you.

You are now mandated to produce or suffer the

slings and arrows of his egregious verbosity.


...probably the wind shift from the north, hope you are better...

 

[Autolycus]

Oi Haunted,

It is poopoo on a stick time

The masterbarder his Modship Autolycus has

noted you.

You are now mandated to produce or suffer the

slings and arrows of his egregious verbosity.


...probably the wind shift from the north, hope you are better...

'egregious verbosity' - Methinks the pot doth call the kettle black

 

[Lefty]

Not a tall lad, not a tall.

Methinks it takes one to know one and

we be right bloody well acquainted then Eh?

 

[BiMike]

Interesting story , I like your style

 

[Autolycus]

Ms H, This story just gets better! Hope the same applies to that wretched migraine.

 

[Lefty]

not that I would have the audacity to correct a MOD...

Mr. H as in Haunted is in fact a lady

I have identified her as the incredibly talented

Lady HaHa..aka HaHa when one is speaking

on a personal level.

 

[Autolycus]

I have amended my error [Mr to Ms] and apologize for the oversight,

But back to the real point - Ryan's plight. One can truly empathize with him this story is so well presented. The Mark/Jess situation is intriguing to say the least.

 

[Lefty]

Lady HaHa,

The mark of a true wordsmith is the omnisexuality of that author. Some

persons write soaps, some write porn, some tell a story and the reader

cares not for author gender, just the authors fertility of mind and ability

to take them through the gestation and birth of the written piece.

Now, nose to the grindstone the surrogate parents await..

 

[zemc87]

A really great story Haunted! Can't wait for the next chapter!

 

[Autolycus]

A thoroughly modern twist on the less than smooth path of true love - how did folks fare in the days before the invention of the telephone/cell phone?

 

[BiMike]

A very interesting twist to a story. It really is surprising how cell phones and text has changed the way people communicate! Its a funny thing but it is very difficult to ignore a buzzing telephone !
Great story something really different ! Carry on the good work