Autumn's Foliage

[calmhunk]

Hey, this is my first time writing a story so I want as much constructive criticism as possible. Please tell what you think and how I can improve! And without further ado...

Autumn’s Foliage: Chapter 1

Autumn. Damn, I hate this season! Cold winds, putrid-colored leaves everywhere on the ground and the beginning of the school year. Oh, and school, another thing I dread. I always have to walk the halls of this conformity-breeding ground. Thank God this is my last year! I mean, they have thick-headed jocks, ditzy cheerleaders who only care about which thick-headed jock fucks them- further increasing their popularity, the Asians, the Hispanics, the honors, the geeks, the Goths, and then the anomalies. I got grouped into the last one… The anomalies are the “weirdo’s,” and the “freaks” of the school. Simply, the anomalies are those who didn’t conform and became social pariahs by those popular in this hell-hole called Ahell High. I mean, what the kind of name is Ahell…well it sure fits this school’s environment well enough. All of the stresses of school- tests, studying, dating, and social activities- arise out of the autumn. Damn, did I mention I hate this season!

Oh, in my rant I forgot to introduce myself, hey! My name is Jacob Wise, I’m your un-average senior, and yes I am gay (why else would I be telling all of you this in the first place if I wasn’t). I’m about 5’11’’, light brown hair in the winter, and brown/dirty blond in the summer. I weigh about 140lbs, and have a swimmer’s build, not from being on a team, but swimming almost every day in my pool at my house. I’m not what you call ruggedly handsome; I have a cute, amiable face. It helps me be as inconspicuous as possible. I’m also no idiot. In fact, I’m the school’s 3rd brightest student. I aimed for third as to not be salutatorian or valedictorian, and have to make a speech. I want to be able to escape this place and move to an Ivy League college far away from Boring, Georgia. It truly is BORING here! Why do you think I swim sooo much!

Well, here I am thinking about everything on my drive to school. The streets are filled with leaves everywhere and the frozen dew on the grass is glistening as I pass by each yard. “Oh, wow! Some people are moving into this town…good luck to them!” I thought as I crossed the bare street and then take a right into the parking lot of the school. I went to my usual parking spot and someone beat me to it. I can’t believe this! What a great way to start a day! I parked two cars up and got out backpack on back, cell phone in pocket, and bad attitude in check- all in mint condition for the start of this school year. I passed by the car that took my place, and I have got to admit it was nice! A dark blue Mazda 6 with the license plate “K-Vin.” I guessed that was his name…

Despite, the morning parking fiasco of mine, my first 3 classes went by fine and uneventful, until it was time for my 4th period. Chemistry. Our teacher always has assigned seats for us, and that can get annoying for many needless-to-say reasons. Mr. Pilfer assigned a seat to all of us. I got one near the bad since he knows I don’t cause trouble, and I luckily and unluckily got paired with an empty desk and Austin, respectively. Austin was just the king of the jocks, and had an ego to match. Between football and baseball, he was the prize of just about every girl and some guys at Ahell. Now mind you, he was hot as hell! Ripped muscles, hard abs, a face to die for, black hair with clear blue eyes. If that body belonged to anyone else, I might have liked it, but it was Austin. For some reason, he loved to pick on me for no reason- that I could see at least.

Mr. Pilfer interrupted the idle chatter of everybody to introduce a new student. I had my eyes closed, so I pried them open and….OH MY GOD! I saw just about the hottest guy I ever saw in my life before my very eyes! He had shaggy, dirty blond hair that countered perfectly with blue eyes that matched Austin’s in brilliance. His hair was slightly long, about above his eyelashes, and wet. He had that “I just came out of the shower, and yes I know my hair is sexy like this look.” He was tanned, more so than other people at this school, and was wearing a tight white shirt that clung to his pecs and abs. I guess he loved tight clothes because his jeans were exactly the way. Tight. They clung to his ass like dried cum on the skin. Oh wow! I really lost myself in thought there.

Anyway, Mr. Pilfer introduced him as a “Kevin Celeste” and was directed to sit…guess where! Come on its not hard! Yep, you got it…right next to me! He sat down and Mr. Pilfer began handing out the syllabus. “Hey” he said, looking directly at me and held out his hand “I guess you can tell my name is Kevin, huh?” His voice was even humble and somewhat timid. He was shy! I shook his hand and instantly felt the jolt of electricity from the contact “Hi, my name is Jacob” I responded with a warm, inviting smile. It turns out school isn’t so bad after all. Did I mention how much I love autumn?

 

[robbieadam]

That was a mint start. I liked it how one minute he hates autumn and the next he doesn't, nice effect. Also, I have no criticism, you shouldn't doubt yourself. From what you've written so far, I can tell that your an excellent writer. I'm looking forward to future chapters now that the introduction is out of the way.

 

[Craiger]

I see you joined us almost a year ago, Calmhunk. What took you so long in beginning that excellent story? Also, I have no criticism about Chapter one. Just looking forward to Chapter two and beyond. Welcome.

Craiger

 

[calmhunk]

Chapter 2

Wow, Kevin was surprisingly interesting! I mean, he liked school and was also hoping to attend an Ivy League for college. He was smart, and sexy. I was in lust, it wasn’t love yet, but who knows, anything can happen. Kevin was part of the family who moved in a block down from me, and he was also the one who parked in my spot. He apologized, but I told him it wasn’t really a problem at all. We really hit it off and were chatting for most of the class, but then Austin happened. Austin overheard that Kevin likes to play football and well….

“Hey, new boy, you like football, huh? Why not trying out for the team and hang with us after school.” The look on my face was something between annoyance and worry; I really hoped that he didn’t become one of those jocks who compared them to Olympian Gods. Actually, I was surprised that they even knew the names of those Gods. But as everything else in my life, the bad luck took over. Kevin agreed and talked with Austin and a couple of his friends at his desk. Apparently, after they talked with the coach, they, and their girlfriends were going to hang out at the local watering hole for our high school’s popular kids, the “Snack Shack.” Kevin sat at the football table at lunch and laughed, chatted and ate with them.

I sat with my regular group of 4. Collette, my closest friend. She was the only one who knew I was gay. She was one of the prettiest girls in school and had an amiable face to match it. Many jocks wanted her for a girlfriend, but she always turned them down. Her figure was voluptuous and attracted many guys to her, but she would only date someone who got to know her first. Oh, did I mention she was valedictorian? The second was my other great friend Danny. He was another one of the more sexy guys in this school. He played soccer and was the captain. He loved sex and would always tell me everything he and his girlfriend, Elle, did. We were friends because we seemed to have quite a bit in common with one another. And of course, the last one was Elle herself. She was a nice girl, and out of everyone in this school, she seems like the one who would stay a virgin until marriage. She was gorgeous, but her personality really shined through for her. She was the sweetest girl you would ever meet. They always cheer me up, and make school bearable.

It turns out that Kevin was in 4 classes of mine total, and we sat next to each other and chatted quite a bit. About 6 girls came up to Kevin, during the different periods, and lightly flirted with him. They laughed at some of the stupidest things, and kept touching his arms and shoulders establishing contact. I felt a little jealous pang down in my gut, because he seemed to get along with each girl that came by. “No way is he gay!” I thought “He’s like any other straight jock, except for being nicer…” The girls were “weak for his physique,” but how can I criticize them, when I’m in the same boat, just not as overt. At the end of 7th period, we said our goodbyes, and he joined those footballers while I walked over to Collette.

“Soo…” she asked with a cute smile on her face.

“So what?” I responded with a slight smile I could not contain.

“Don’t give me that Jacob Franklin Wise! Who is he and is he…you know?”

“Gah! Don’t you my middle name in public like that! You know I hate it, and to answer your question…Kevin Celeste and I hope, but I don’t think so.” I responded with comfortable nonchalant remark. After the conversation ended, Elle, wrapped by Danny’s arms, came up and we began our daily after school chat.

Danny and Elle drove off to her house….I wonder why? Yep, sarcasm intended. While Collette went on to her various clubs and activities, leaving me to go home and get some shut eye. I got home, passing by Kevin’s house again, the moving trucks gone, and the doors closed. I parked, walked, and flopped down on my bed. I think I fell asleep quickly after that…

I heard a noise at the front door. I asked who was there at the top of the stairs and a muffled “Kevin” answered. I rushed down the stairs and caught my breath before opening the door. And there he was. Kevin in some running shorts that extended mid-thigh. He looked good in a tight shirt, but without one was even better! He had the most exquisite body I’ve ever seen! A lust dusting of blond hair between his pecs and a treasure trail that extended past his shorts from his navel.

“Can I come in?” he asked looking around at my house and all the knick knacks in the hallway. I let him in, closed the door and turned around. He was facing me and we were about an inch apart from each other, I felt his body heat radiating towards me and I stared into his eyes. He leaned in and I closed my eyes. I felt his soft wet lips brushing against mine, his hands touching my hip lightly and pulling me into him. His flesh touched my own, and I shivered at his touch. I felt his tongue push between my lips, and it caressed my own. Our breathing quickened and were began gyrating against each other’s cocks. We broke free from one another and my hands explored his body, pecs, abs, and ass- everything while he kissed me at the nape of my neck. His strong arms were cradled against my hips and I felt his rock hard cock grinding against my own.

We continued our kiss as I led him into the living room. My parents were out for my sister’s violin concert. I lay back on the couch pulling him down with me. His weight was welcome as he broke the kiss and began kissing down my chest. I let out an appreciative moan when he began running circles around my nipples. He sucked one in and worked his magic. The skin on skin felt, to me, like the finest of silk as he dragged his arms lower and onto my stomach caressing my abs. He licked my navel before following the trail to my boxer briefs, where a noticeable bulge was standing at attention. Kevin pulled at the material with his teeth and was able to free my dick. It slapped against my stomach before shooting back up to Kevin’s eager face.

He began licking tenderly at the base. Then he made long, slow strokes to the head licking the precum that formed. I was in ecstasy when he began sucking on my balls. That was a really sensitive area and I absolutely loved contact there. My breathing quickened and he noticed drawing away from my balls to begin sucking on the head of my cock, which now was engorged and was bigger than I’ve ever seen it! He took it in his mouth and began sliding up and down the first half of it. He swirled his tongue along the way and used his hands to run up and down my front side. I was in heaven with this Adonis servicing me with such expertise! I gave out one terrific moan when I felt my cock extend into his throat as he impaled the rest of me, rubbing his nose in my trimmed pubes. He let out a moan himself and I felt the vibrations through my cock.

I couldn’t take standing still anymore, so I began thrusting slowly at first into Kevin’s mouth. He eagerly accepted it and sucked vigorously in approval for me to go faster. I began quickening my pace, moaning each time it entered his throat. I could see his exquisite figure above me, servicing me; I couldn’t believe it! That thought is what drove me to pure teenage bliss as I unloaded shot after shot of cum into his mouth. He swallowed all of it and never missed a beat. I gave out a loud moan for each shot and I lasted a good 8-10 shots before it went back to a dribble.

I closed my eyes as he came back up and kissed me, but wait… I felt something wet on my stomach! I opened my eyes to an empty room! What the hell! I looked down to see my stomach and boxer briefs soaked with cum.

Of course it was a dream!

 

[kcm17480]

Very cool story or should I say a very hot one and very well written. I don't know if I can hold out very long for chapter 3. Nice cliff hanger.

 

[Craiger]

You are tricky....... that was a great twist besides being hot and sexy. Anticipating chapter 3.

Craiger

 

[Endlessnight500]

Yeah, great story so far, hope to see more of it soon.

 

[robbieadam]

Really well written, I'd like to see a third chapter if your willing.

 

[harry113]

Yes Please ... more Please
Harry

 

[Mstrbkr54]

You got talent young man!

MORE PLEASE!

 

[wyndhampaul]

Welcome to fresh and exciting new tallent. JUB certainly knows how to attract the worlds best.

 

[calmhunk]

I might pop in a chapter or two, here and there, but with my course load I don't neccessarily have the time to keep putting up chapters daily. Short chapter, but I'm relieveing tension before an exam today!

~Chapter 3~

Holy hell! Maybe I'm losing it? I never cum in my sleep, well except for that first time. I couldn't believe! After I cleaned up, I just sat in awe at my computer desk and checking my mail. I think I maybe more than just a little 'hot under the collar' for our school's newest jock, and in the time span of one day! That must've been a new record...wow, my Kevin is really adjusting.
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Wait!?!? Did I say, MY Kevin! I really am losing it!

After, I finished checking my emails, my messenger popped up and a simple "hey" was the message in the box. The person was "bohoboy89" and I couldn't remember where I heard that name before...wait a minute! Austin! I remember hearing him tell Kevin his messenger name. Why the fuck was he trying to chat with me!

"What do you want?" I responded trying to fit my attitude through the screen and out of his.

"what, no hi, hey or hello " he replied a little smugly.

"Alright. Hello, how the fuck do you get my messenger name?"

"I'm not saying now, u are mean."

Was he toying with me? Was he now harrassing me on the internet as well?

"I'll leave if you don't say."

"Fine. Mr. Pilfer assigned u as my tutor for chem. We have to meet for study sessions. I feel the same way as u, u know."

Good ol' Mr. Pilfer assigning me to my archnemesis...he probably thought, I would help the one who needs it most. Stupid binding tutoring agreement. I knew it would come back to bite me in the ass some day.
"Fine. Discuss tomorrow. Bye."

"Wait! I also thought u should know. Kevin kept asking questions about you. It seems he is very interested in his first friend here!"

I could feel the sneer coming through his computer...but was it true. I was scared so I just X'ed out of messenger and signed off.

Was Kevin really asking a lot about me? What kind of things did he ask? Wonder if he'll bring it up in class tomorrow? Is he gonna be a jock? Is he gonna turn into one of 'them?' Which girl will end up being his?...

And on the 765th question, Jacob fell asleep.

 

[tomersh]

nice story ....but i hope the nxt chapter is longer...(if it's possible )

 

[kcm17480]

I like your sense of humor in this story. Very well put together even if the chapter was a little short.

 

[Craiger]

Calmhunk,

Glad to see that you are continuing the story. Short chapter or not, it sounds great and I hope when your course load relaxes a bit more you will post another one. Good luck on your exam.

Craiger