Long Hollow Peak is a 13 Chapter thriller. I'll be posting the chapters to this thread as I complete them. If you saw any previous threads of Long Hollow Peak that is before the remastered edition. The old edition received valid criticism resulting in a full rewrite. The story has not been reviewed or edited.
Cries of agonizing pain went ignored on that cold and starless night! Grey clouds smothered the night sky and even though it was not raining now, the stone alleyway lay moist. A puddle of scarlet red slowly crept across the stones as she huffed and jerked! A mother of a fatherless child she did not want to be… or so she thought.
As the years went by the young boy was frequently reminded of the pain his mother endured alone that night. Life in the medieval ghetto was difficult and receiving recognition for any amount of hard work null and void. But even so he still tried to cheer her up now and again by drawing pictures of his fantasies. She barely even noticed them half of the time as she tried to keep the tiny room they rented. It was all that she could afford by selling herself. Thus the boy commonly bared witness to the men she entertained for quite the desperate penny.
The sounds they made annoyed the boy and he didn’t want to hear it. Minding his own business he tried to paint an imaginary forest using her lipstick across the dirty wooden floor. There was not a penny for paper or pastilles. The smell in the room was awful to those who newly entered and even some barbaric customers would not dare stomach it. It was the smell of sweat, lust, and even urine. The black trench-coat of her current customer hung against a hook on the wall.
The boy briefly looked back to the ‘customer’ painting his mothers face and chest in his golden stream and immediately regretted it. Eagerly she leaned forward smiling with her dirty teeth and held her hands forward so humbly. The man snorted and pulled up his pants, he got what he came for, a ‘service’ even though it was not on par with the quality he expected. Realizing that he was not going to give her a penny she went into a blind rage wrestling the snickering man out of their room! He did not even get the time to grab his coat by the time he was outside! She was considered frail and vulnerable and such a shame to the ghetto that no one could even respect her. But her shrills and shrieks were enough to send any low class businessman packing.
Angrily she hurled a pillow at the snickering man as he slipped out of the yard. She was huffing with rage as she roughly wiped the piss and semen from her face and chest. The boy gently tugged on her arm wanting to show her the picture he drew. So annoyed was she that she tried to rid him with a single swipe of her hand. It worked. The boy fell back onto the ground onto the mess of lipstick on the floor.
“It is all YOUR fault!” she cried out. “If it was not for you, your father would still be here! You are a little piece of a shit and I am ashamed to even call you my son!” She turned her back to her petrified boy who now crawled backwards to hide between some dirty laundry and a broken cupboard in plain sight. Reaching for her lipstick she expected to paint her thin lips red but there seemed to be none of it left in the tube no matter how much she twisted it. Tossing the useless thing aside she slammed her hands onto the dressing table causing the boy to shudder.
Slowly she turned around to face him but her eyes first caught the glimpse of red on the ground. It reminded her of the red in that dark alleyway six years ago! The blood! Her blood! Losing herself in a fit of rage she leapt at her son grabbing onto what she could to keep him close as her hand lashed at him again and again!
Once his screams silenced the only sound that remained was her huffing as sweat dripped from her face. Leaving the pathetic pile of shame on the floor. She finally looked to the picture that now consisted of mostly smudges and dirt. However, she could still make out the feint form of trees. Perhaps his fantasy could be hers too... There was a forest a couple of miles out of town. She could rid herself of his constant whimpering, pestering, and she would no longer have to suffer the glances of their neighbors when they see just how thin he is.
Throwing him onto the bed in agitation she knew she couldn’t just drag him outside in his shorts and blouse. The nosy neighbors might become suspicious! Roughly she pulled on his shoes without even bothering with socks. Not having a jersey for him she grabbed her recent customer’s coat and roughly threw it over the boy’s shoulders. Confused and afraid he couldn’t do much but walk as she forced him forward with a hand behind his back. They hurried down the flight of stairs that lead them out of the yard.
Most of the town were asleep and no one even noticed her rushing out of town. The little boy looked back to a sign that read ‘Welcome to Rosewood’ a sign he would probably never see again. The hours ticked by but it remained dark and dreary. They were nearing a forest and some wild shrubbery as the first droplets began to fall. She braved the unknown forest dragging and shoving her exhausted child along. She was taking him to the peak. The peak of Long Hollow Creek.
A heavy weight lifted from her shoulders as she laughed with joy. She didn’t have to take care of him anymore. This was finally the end of her suffering! She made him stand on the edge of the cliff, trembling, frightened as she took one last look at him. Her eyes were wild and so were his as his tiny heart pounded in his chest. Rushing forward she was going to ram him right down the peak but where her hands were to slam his chest he cowered into a bundle leaving her nothing to stop her momentum!
Atrocious screams and cracks were the last sound he heard from her before he looked down the edge of the cliff. Her broken body lay still in a pool of blood as her pain came to an end...
== Prologue ==
Cries of agonizing pain went ignored on that cold and starless night! Grey clouds smothered the night sky and even though it was not raining now, the stone alleyway lay moist. A puddle of scarlet red slowly crept across the stones as she huffed and jerked! A mother of a fatherless child she did not want to be… or so she thought.
As the years went by the young boy was frequently reminded of the pain his mother endured alone that night. Life in the medieval ghetto was difficult and receiving recognition for any amount of hard work null and void. But even so he still tried to cheer her up now and again by drawing pictures of his fantasies. She barely even noticed them half of the time as she tried to keep the tiny room they rented. It was all that she could afford by selling herself. Thus the boy commonly bared witness to the men she entertained for quite the desperate penny.
The sounds they made annoyed the boy and he didn’t want to hear it. Minding his own business he tried to paint an imaginary forest using her lipstick across the dirty wooden floor. There was not a penny for paper or pastilles. The smell in the room was awful to those who newly entered and even some barbaric customers would not dare stomach it. It was the smell of sweat, lust, and even urine. The black trench-coat of her current customer hung against a hook on the wall.
The boy briefly looked back to the ‘customer’ painting his mothers face and chest in his golden stream and immediately regretted it. Eagerly she leaned forward smiling with her dirty teeth and held her hands forward so humbly. The man snorted and pulled up his pants, he got what he came for, a ‘service’ even though it was not on par with the quality he expected. Realizing that he was not going to give her a penny she went into a blind rage wrestling the snickering man out of their room! He did not even get the time to grab his coat by the time he was outside! She was considered frail and vulnerable and such a shame to the ghetto that no one could even respect her. But her shrills and shrieks were enough to send any low class businessman packing.
Angrily she hurled a pillow at the snickering man as he slipped out of the yard. She was huffing with rage as she roughly wiped the piss and semen from her face and chest. The boy gently tugged on her arm wanting to show her the picture he drew. So annoyed was she that she tried to rid him with a single swipe of her hand. It worked. The boy fell back onto the ground onto the mess of lipstick on the floor.
“It is all YOUR fault!” she cried out. “If it was not for you, your father would still be here! You are a little piece of a shit and I am ashamed to even call you my son!” She turned her back to her petrified boy who now crawled backwards to hide between some dirty laundry and a broken cupboard in plain sight. Reaching for her lipstick she expected to paint her thin lips red but there seemed to be none of it left in the tube no matter how much she twisted it. Tossing the useless thing aside she slammed her hands onto the dressing table causing the boy to shudder.
Slowly she turned around to face him but her eyes first caught the glimpse of red on the ground. It reminded her of the red in that dark alleyway six years ago! The blood! Her blood! Losing herself in a fit of rage she leapt at her son grabbing onto what she could to keep him close as her hand lashed at him again and again!
Once his screams silenced the only sound that remained was her huffing as sweat dripped from her face. Leaving the pathetic pile of shame on the floor. She finally looked to the picture that now consisted of mostly smudges and dirt. However, she could still make out the feint form of trees. Perhaps his fantasy could be hers too... There was a forest a couple of miles out of town. She could rid herself of his constant whimpering, pestering, and she would no longer have to suffer the glances of their neighbors when they see just how thin he is.
Throwing him onto the bed in agitation she knew she couldn’t just drag him outside in his shorts and blouse. The nosy neighbors might become suspicious! Roughly she pulled on his shoes without even bothering with socks. Not having a jersey for him she grabbed her recent customer’s coat and roughly threw it over the boy’s shoulders. Confused and afraid he couldn’t do much but walk as she forced him forward with a hand behind his back. They hurried down the flight of stairs that lead them out of the yard.
Most of the town were asleep and no one even noticed her rushing out of town. The little boy looked back to a sign that read ‘Welcome to Rosewood’ a sign he would probably never see again. The hours ticked by but it remained dark and dreary. They were nearing a forest and some wild shrubbery as the first droplets began to fall. She braved the unknown forest dragging and shoving her exhausted child along. She was taking him to the peak. The peak of Long Hollow Creek.
A heavy weight lifted from her shoulders as she laughed with joy. She didn’t have to take care of him anymore. This was finally the end of her suffering! She made him stand on the edge of the cliff, trembling, frightened as she took one last look at him. Her eyes were wild and so were his as his tiny heart pounded in his chest. Rushing forward she was going to ram him right down the peak but where her hands were to slam his chest he cowered into a bundle leaving her nothing to stop her momentum!
Atrocious screams and cracks were the last sound he heard from her before he looked down the edge of the cliff. Her broken body lay still in a pool of blood as her pain came to an end...

