Michael

[swerve]

Wow- VERY dark... yet SO gripping!
awaiting the next instalment, swerve.

Thanks rocabar!!!

I'm on a mad dash across the country -- literally from Coast to Coast -- in an effort to get home EARLY for the holidays...

Don't want to post any more until my brain gets rested up!!!

 

[swerve]

Swerve

An excellent performance.......intense, impactive and compelling.....

well, read the p/m.

Thanks Lefty for the post and the SUPER NICE PM!!!

Hope you're surviving the storm out that a way -- and I'm glad that I outran it!!!

 

[Lefty]

Swerve,

You know I don't do super nice. You know at best I do mild acerbic.

Don't trash my hard earned reputation in a public place. Closets are

like attics and basements...not for the public..............lol

Seriously, that was an eval not a back pat. Trust you are home and you

boys have a great holiday....Lefty O'Poet

 

[DonQuixote]

Swerve,
You have a lot of talent in your dexterous digits, and the possibly warped mind attached to same!

Your story is compelling. extremely dark, but compelling.

Your chapter length is not bad - as Chaz said, they are as long as they need to be in order to get the scene across.

I feel for poor Seth, who thought his street smarts would let him take care of his family with his body for relatively easy money - living a hard life.

One he paid a high price for.

And our latter day Mike the Ripper, or whatever the fuck he turns out to be.

You have many different angles playing out for us. I look forward to seeing how you "massage" the story for us.

 

[EasyRory]

I like the story as it progresses but need to tell you the first two chapters were near perfect.

The first chapter could stand alone as a complete short story. Then I kind of held my breath for chapter two, thinking it might disappoint; but it didn't at all. It was a beautiful balance for chapter one.

You could have stopped right there and I'd have been more than satisfied.

 

[Lefty]

XXX or Swerve,

You stated this and regardless of what that butterbrain EasyRory says, the story does not Stand alone...Your brain child is approaching maturity and their is a table
full of voracious relatives at the table waiting to be fed.
Get on that keyboard and ride boy...Ride. (now, was that subtle or what?)m

 

[DonQuixote]

That's you, Lefty - Subtle.
Very Subtle.

Cast Iron Dutch Oven over the head, subtle.

Don't be dissing EasyRory, too much. He meant well in the accolades. As an author, maybe he forgot how much we
readers consume.

 

[Lefty]

donnie, get
head out of the sand
no diss on unEasyRoryStoryMan.
the man was a vehicle to convey a thought.
Subtle me telling the Swerve to quit fucking
around and write. E/R just happened to be
in the neighborhood and acted as a catalyst to
get the point across. E/R will know that, Mr. High
and Bye Ways will know that...and now, hopefully
you know that. I realize that often my deft wit and
droll humour exceed your grasp, but can't you wait until
someone bleeds to break out the antiseptic and bandages?



Morning Dairy Queen......

 

[EasyRory]

Don't be dissing EasyRory, too much.

Lefty can call me anything he wants.

I still think the first two chapters can stand alone as a tight, complete short story, something that's very hard to write.

 

[Lefty]

E/R

I wouldn't diss you....use you as a springboard but never diss you...First,

I like you and your stuff.....Second, I can't, I'm vulnerable too

And we don't want swerve to get lazy letting this one be done.


lol

happy holidays

 

[DonQuixote]

can't you wait until
someone bleeds to break out the antiseptic and bandages?

In a word, No.
THAT would go counter to my noble purpose in life - to right wrongs.
(Especially when it means WE get to mix it up - THAT's just so much fun!)

Easy Rory,
I will, of course, defer to your desires.

 

[Lefty]

Don't you mean your ignoble life goal

The one where you exemplify, typify and

otherwise endorse and support the concept

you have live by and sworn fealty to for some

FIFTY years or so now?

"
"My Noble Purpose is to Wrong Rightly"

And in so doing sponsor Howdy Doody Lifestyles/


EH.....EH.....EH.....EH

 

[DonQuixote]

"My Noble Purpose is to Wrong Rightly"
And in so doing sponsor Howdy Doody Lifestyles/

That would be YOUR porpoise[sic] in life, LeftyCuss.

 

[Lefty]

Quick........give the man one of dynks cookies...no give him two....

hell, give him the whole plate. and see if there's any Cuervo left

in one of the dumpster condo's.

 

[EJMichaels]

Just found this thread (thanks to seeing Lefty's recent post) ... no time to read, just a quick skim - will definitely be back.

 

[Lefty]

So there

See Donnie doo doo, unlike you...

I serve a valid purpose.

 

[DonQuixote]

So there
See Donnie doo doo, unlike you...
I serve a valid purpose.

(We have to make allowances for the storm driven weary. He forgets how many folk have followed a link I've provided, or OTHER services provided for the technologically challenged.)

 

[swerve]

The story WILL continue...

POSSIBLY even tonight with Chapter 5...

I apologize for any delays -- and for the possible demise of Windsors (hope that dynk's cookies saved him)...

I've finished my travels through Christmas, and hope to update more regularly over the holidays...

 

[swerve]

The first chapter could stand alone as a complete short story. Then I kind of held my breath for chapter two, thinking it might disappoint; but it didn't at all. It was a beautiful balance for chapter one.

You could have stopped right there and I'd have been more than satisfied.

THANKS!!!

Maybe I should have...

Now the pressure is on -- and I'm not sure that I can handle the heat...

 

[Lefty]

Oh no.

You got to cruise and skate and skate and cruise for 2 chapters as a virgin. At

that point the hymen was torn/ the hyphen was born and Swerve-Writer was

christened....We gave you space for the training pants days and the training

jock strap days. Puberty has arrived... Now, Get it hard-be the bard-use your

pen-it's that time again. Come in dollops or expect the whollops--no more delay,

here big boys play. Get down and write or no Opi tonight.

Subtle..............I'd say no, Funny...........I sure hope so.

Welcome home, Happy Holidays...now get to work.

Professor Lefty O'Meanicuss
Lexicographer of the JUB