Re: My senior year with tony
Zack:
The online editor tends to compact, remove blanks.
When you post, try "Preview Post" to see what your post will look like before it is set in concrete.
You can edit your own work for a short period after posting, but not a long time.
You can send Autolycus a PM and ask him both for help this time and editing advice when posting. He is the primary moderator for this forum and a great help to budding authors.
Trying to put the compacting aside, you have a decent story thread started, and I look forward to reading more.
As a more seasoned reader/provider of feedback, your grammar isn't quite on par with 4.0 students I know.
Always put yourself last in lists, and frequently you're going to be "I" not "me".
Tony and I headed to the locker rooms . . . not
Me and Tony headed to the locker rooms.
One way to help tell which to use is to say the sentence to yourself with JUST your personal pronoun in the sentence and see how it sounds -- whichever sounds more natural is probably the right one - then use the same one with the other names.
I want to get home --> Tony and I want to get home.
That isn't for me --> That isn't for Tony and me.
Keep up the work. I look forward to your next, more spaciously formatted post!
Zack:
The online editor tends to compact, remove blanks.
When you post, try "Preview Post" to see what your post will look like before it is set in concrete.
You can edit your own work for a short period after posting, but not a long time.
You can send Autolycus a PM and ask him both for help this time and editing advice when posting. He is the primary moderator for this forum and a great help to budding authors.
Trying to put the compacting aside, you have a decent story thread started, and I look forward to reading more.
As a more seasoned reader/provider of feedback, your grammar isn't quite on par with 4.0 students I know.
Always put yourself last in lists, and frequently you're going to be "I" not "me".
Tony and I headed to the locker rooms . . . not
Me and Tony headed to the locker rooms.
One way to help tell which to use is to say the sentence to yourself with JUST your personal pronoun in the sentence and see how it sounds -- whichever sounds more natural is probably the right one - then use the same one with the other names.
I want to get home --> Tony and I want to get home.
That isn't for me --> That isn't for Tony and me.
Keep up the work. I look forward to your next, more spaciously formatted post!
