Please critique my profile

[chrisdobro]

Can someone please critique my MH profile?

I am a reasonable guy and very flexible with my interests and likes and what I would do. I am pretty good with one on one conversation and my concern is that I do not come across very well online.

There are plenty of guys I like and I would like to think that some of those like me back. I am concerned that some things I say or show on my profile scare guys off.

So, if you have MH, please go there and feast your eyes on my profile. skyhorse is the username.

I suppose that profile is only one aspect of online dating. If you wish, send me an email and critique our conversation. I will be interested and appreciative in anything you can gather up! Thank you.

 

[mbamike]

I read your profile. I came away thinking you are wanting to engage in some advanced level academic conversation rather than looking for sex.

 

[chrisdobro]

Thank you.

I have redesigned it now using some business processes I know. I will be working on it. Right now it sounds too dry and too business oriented, while sex is something that needs to be fun.

For your reference

Before

Hi!
My profile is generally up to date, so check it out. Other than that, what do you want to know? I am not the type that offends or freaks out on you easily when it comes to dating, sex or relationships. Just ask me. I'll let you know.

--- taking a break --

I host a gay social night sometimes in my city and you are welcome to come and check it out.

-- if you just wanna talk, good topics of discussion with me are "How to solve any particular problem on Putnam Exam", or "simple yet efficient implementation of disjointed set algorithm in C++". Trust me I will listen then ! ​

After

Hi!

I am here to find a guy whom I find attractive by mid-summer to engage into sexual activity together on a weekly basis so that my sexual need is satisfied while managing my search process for effectiveness.

For this I need to collaborate with willing partners who have an active sex drive and are able to make the time in their schedule to plan for regular play-time activities with me.

This is a challenging task and something I cannot do by myself. I need your help. If your goals for being on this site align with mine, contact me and let's work through them together.​

 

[strosbuff88]

Sounds like a resume or a job ad... not attractive at all. Is that how you talk to your friends?

lol, so true! the inclusion of objectives and goals. i'd almost fear asking for references haha.

 

[Corny]

Well basically you are looking for sex. And for that it sounds incredibly elaborate. I mean .. people who just want sex, don't care for all the words .. as you have realized with your last sentence.

Hot by the way

 

[HunterM]

lol, so true! the inclusion of objectives and goals. i'd almost fear asking for references haha.

You guys are killing me. Killing me; I tell ya!

Dude,
"I am here to find a guy whom I find attractive by mid-summer to engage into sexual activity together on a weekly basis so that my sexual need is satisfied while managing my search process for effectiveness." This sounds like your biological clock is ticking.

How about change it into this: "Summer is here! Looking for fun...in and out of bed "
Then list a few fun hobbies that most people can relate to. It's just a conversation ice breaker to let people know a little bit about you.

 

[Lube]

How about something more along the lines of:

I love hairless men's bodies with swimmer builds. I love sucking cock and would love to make you blow a load (down my throat, on my face, whatever). I'm looking for sex without commitment and expect you are too, as I'm just exploring my sexuality. Will try anything without shit or blood, and love being dominated by a burly man dressed in leather. I will gladly be your boy. Safe sex only, condom a must. I love smelling your white socks while still on your feet, although that's not a must-have. Never tried a three-way, that could be fun!



In other words, let it all out. Or, at the very least, tease (leave stuff to the imagination, but say something to get their imaginations going). But whatever you do, don't write a freakin' business contract, ok?

 

[rareboy]

Totally a turn-off. At first I thought you might be joking.

Loosen up.

Read the other profiles.

Make it seem sexy and interesting and fun to be with you.

Although....when I read what you think would be a good convo topic in your original profile....I'm worried that only 1 in 100.000 might agree....and they are likely to be a bit weird.

 

[Corny]

^ you love hairless men with swimmer builds?

i would have not guessed it

 

[KaraBulut]

If you're looking for a relationship, your profile is on the wrong site. ManHunt is more window-shopping for NSA sex.

If you're looking for sex, listen to the suggestions above- make it brief, to the point and limit yourself to a couple of pics that tell people what they're getting when you come over.

 

[Lube]

totally going to copy and paste that into my A4A profile... "I'm just looking for friends" hasn't been doing too much for me lately

Yeah, not a great place to find friends.

^ you love hairless men with swimmer builds?

i would have not guessed it

You guessed right. That profile is so not me. Was just trying to give some salacious ideas.

 

[chrisdobro]

Thanks guys

I went with HunterM's advice. Simple and some hobbies listed. So far so good

Really though like others have said, and I have noticed, it doesn't matter as much what you put on your profile exactly. Pics are probably noticed first, then your profile is read.

I guess it does start to matter when it is way too negative or angry or something. If it's just boring, it probably won't hurt you as much. But I think it will help if it's light, breezy and to the point.