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Brad, Brad, Brad...... What are you doing?! That is more than a drink. James is pretty understanding of a lot of things, but I think that is a lot to be understanding of. Nice update Astare, definitely keeping it interesting and wanting more. Anxiously awaiting to see what the morning brings for Brad when he wakes up. Also I like the music to go along with the parts it is a nice touch while reading, especially knowing they are in a bar.
Well I am definitely glad you have been able to continue writting. This is an amazing story and has been a great read thus far. I agree I don't think I would do a lot of the things Brad has done, but it is interesting reading like this and seeing how things play out. Then you get the benefit of determining how it turns out and in what way.
I am definitelly liking the wallpapers havent ever seen that site before. I am still, slowly, going through all the New York ones they have. I will have to check out Seattle next. I also noticed they had a group for the Grand Canyon, wouldnt mind going through those as well. Those are all some amazing pictures.
Alcohol can be dangerous! You're right that James has been understanding thus far. You'll just have to wait and see how he reacts - if he even finds out at all...
I'm glad you like the music! That's pretty much the exact music I have in my head as I write some of these parts. And if and when I film it, it's the music I plan to use in the film - which probably won't ever happen.
Well, as Vater says, Brad, Brad, Brad...... What are you doing?! It may be wise for Brad to limit his drinking habits. He had a similar situation with Kelly and now Derek. The problem here is how does he explain this to James? Will James be compassionate enough to let this pass or will the worm of mistrust work it's way into the relationship. Brad has a lot to learn if he wants a secure relationship to form. James is due back and will undoubtedly call. Will he find Brad at Derek's? Let's see how part 29 turn out.
Brad does seem to get into a lot of trouble after a couple of drinks. At times it definitely has a detrimental effect on his life. As he is telling the story, this is something he may not be aware of, because he never mentions it explicitly, but it's something a lot of people deal with in real life. Hopefully everything shall get better in time
Ah shit, this was even a worse disaster than I imagined. Didn't suspect that Brad was this big of a douche bag. Run James run - Brad isn't bf material.
Wow, Brad's stirring up more controversy than I thought he would! All I can say is - all of us have done things we're not proud of. Is James the type of person that understands that and is willing to look past the flaws? Or will he not be willing to stay with Brad given the circumstances? We'll find out soon...
I'm glad you like the music! That's pretty much the exact music I have in my head as I write some of these parts. And if and when I film it, it's the music I plan to use in the film - which probably won't ever happen.
That is a movie I would love to see, if you do get the chance to film it, you must share!
Can't wait for the next part to see how this is going to continue to develop. Really anxious to see how Brad reacts when he wakes up next to Derek and he no longer has the alcohol in his system.
Wow, Brad's stirring up more controversy than I thought he would! All I can say is - all of us have done things we're not proud of. Is James the type of person that understands that and is willing to look past the flaws? Or will he not be willing to stay with Brad given the circumstances? We'll find out soon...
Aint that the truth, about all having done stuff we are not proud of. Guess maybe its part of what makes us human, as long as we learn from them and try not to do the things agian.
Ah shit, this was even a worse disaster than I imagined. Didn't suspect that Brad was this big of a douche bag. Run James run - Brad isn't bf material.
I think we have to wait to see what transpires before making such judgments about Brad. As Vater says we all have done things we regret and have to learn from. Part of being human. Also, there will be ups and downs in any relationship. Even James could have had a tryst after one of his parties in New York. Alcohol can lessen the inhibitions on most anyone and let lust take control. Only two people know how this will be resolved, AstareGod and Brad. Let's wait for Part 29 to find out.
That is a movie I would love to see, if you do get the chance to film it, you must share!
Can't wait for the next part to see how this is going to continue to develop. Really anxious to see how Brad reacts when he wakes up next to Derek and he no longer has the alcohol in his system.
Aint that the truth, about all having done stuff we are not proud of. Guess maybe its part of what makes us human, as long as we learn from them and try not to do the things agian.
It's a good thing the film didn't get further than the cutting room floor. The production values were awful, and that version of the screenplay was the first draft. Now that there's much more depth to the story, the idea is once again viable. If money were no object... it would be done, and soon.
I think we have to wait to see what transpires before making such judgments about Brad. As Vater says we all have done things we regret and have to learn from. Part of being human. Also, there will be ups and downs in any relationship. Even James could have had a tryst after one of his parties in New York. Alcohol can lessen the inhibitions on most anyone and let lust take control. Only two people know how this will be resolved, AstareGod and Brad. Let's wait for Part 29 to find out.
You and vater hit the nail on the head. As hard as it is not to do, we also can't judge Brad on just this one incident. But then again, we are only outside observers. James may or may not react the same way we do.
Good day, Jubbers! I woke up extra early this morning so I could get this new part posted, seeing as some of you are anxiously awaiting it. Enjoy!
Part 29
I wake up to the sensation of Derek circling his finger around my nipple.
"Good morning, sleepyhead."
I yawn and open my eyes. "Good morning."
He continues playing with my nipples and chest hair. "So, remember everything from our lesson last night?"
I nod. My memory of the previous night is a bit fuzzy, but I can definitely recall the lesson.
He continues, "I bet you can't wait to use what you learned on James."
Oh shit. How the hell could I have forgotten?! How much did I have to drink last night? I don't know, but one thing is certain: I need to get the hell out of here. And fast.
I lift the blanket and see I am still completely naked.
"Where are my clothes?"
"What's the rush? Where do you have to be on a Sunday?"
I couldn't think of anything else. "Church."
"Church? Hah. Well, your clothes are still over there on the couch. Hopefully whatever church you go to has nothing against two naked guys sharing a bed."
I hop out of bed and run to where my clothes are. I dig my phone out of my pants pocket and check my texts. James had sent me a text a few hours ago saying he and his dad had gotten on the flight back to Seattle, which means they should both be landing here soon.
I quickly pull my underwear and pants on, then whip my shirt over my head and pull it down. Derek walks over to me as I'm putting on my socks and shoes.
"I wish you didn't have to rush out so fast."
"Me either."
"Is there some eleventh commandment I don't know about? Thou shalt not be late?"
"Yeah, something like that."
I finish tying my shoes and head for the door.
"Brad, can I call you sometime?"
"Yeah. Sorry I have to be leaving like this. See you later."
I open the door, run to my car, get in, and speed off.
I call Gary on the way. Pick up, pick up, please pick up!
"Hey Brad. How's it going?"
"Gary, I've done something horrible."
"Don't worry. Just tell me where to meet you and I'll help you hide the body."
"It'll probably be my body you'll be helping James bury after he's done with me!"
"What the hell happened?"
"You know how I told you Derek and I had planned to hang out last night?"
"Yeah - oh, no, Brad, you didn't."
My silence is enough to confirm his suspicions.
"You're right; James is going to kill you! Where is he now?"
"Somewhere up in the sky. His flight took off from New York a few hours ago. Gary, what am I doing to do?"
"Calm down. What's done is done. But here's what I suggest. Remember how nonchalant he was when you told him about Kelly?"
"Yeah."
"Well, do the same thing now."
I'm a bit confused. "What do you mean? Tell him the truth?"
"Yeah."
I admit that option had yet to cross my mind. I'm convinced any mention of my tryst with Derek will certainly set James on a rampage and he will either murder me or turn around and never want to see me again.
Gary continues, "Honesty has worked in your favor thus far. I say stick with it."
"But I basically messed around with someone else while we were dating! He's not going to want to have anything to do with me after I tell him!"
"Look, with how much of a blabbermouth Derek is, James is going to find out anyway. It would be best if he found out from you first."
I sigh. "I guess you're right. He should be getting in soon. Hopefully he heads straight to my place and doesn't take any calls."
"Good luck. Tell me how it goes."
* * * * *
I get home. I'm so nervous my heart feels like it's about to pound out of my chest. I strip down and shower, taking some deep breaths and trying to relax in the hot water. I get out and dry myself off. The phone rings. It's James. My heart rate shoots up again.
"Hey James."
"Uh, hey Brad." He must have noticed the anxiety in my voice. "Everything OK?"
"Yeah. You back on the ground?"
"Yep, we just touched down and taxied in. We have to get luggage and all, so it should be another half-hour or so before I can start heading your way. I can't wait to see you!"
"Me either. All right. Let me know when you're on your way."
"Will do."
We hang up. While I wait for him to arrive, I pour myself a lemon drop. Nothing like some strong liquor to help calm nerves. I sit at the counter and drink a bit faster than usual. Several minutes later, I pour myself another. James texts and says he and his dad are on the way to his dad's, and from there, he will head to my place.
Time passes by at an achingly slow place. I finish my second lemon drop and start making a third when I hear a knock at the door. I guess the moment is here.
I walk to the door and open it. James stands there, smiling, with a bouquet of flowers in his hand.
"Hey, cutie. It's great to see you again."
He leans in and kisses me. He hands the flowers to me.
"Thanks. Come in."
He comes in, and I close the door behind him. He walks to the couch and sits down while I put the flowers in a vase.
He notices the lemon drop I'm in the middle of making. "Hey, can you make me one of those, too?"
"Sure."
I make two lemon drops and hand him his. "You let anyone else know you're back?"
"Not yet. I haven't spoken to anyone over the phone today except for you."
"How was the flight back?"
"Pretty good. It was direct, so no layovers this time, which means I get to see my cutie that much sooner!"
He reaches up and squeezes my hand, but I'm slow to respond. He tilts his head and looks into my eyes. His tone of voice turns serious. "Brad, I can tell something is wrong. What is it?"
"I, uh, don't know how to tell you."
"It can't be that bad. Just say it."
I take a large sip of my third lemon drop, swallow it all in one nervous gulp, and clear my throat. "I slept with Derek."
James gasps loudly, and his jaw falls to the floor.
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This song/music video doesn't really have anything to do with the story, but it's nice to listen to anyway, so here you go!
I love the lines, "Honesty has worked in your favor thus far. I say stick with it." But then when Brad does this right thing and tells James, he over tells it, doesn't he? Didn't he share a BJ with Derek; he didn't "sleep" with him, did he? If he did, I missed the grunt and groan part. Now we find out how big of a saint James really is. Brad needs a forgiving archangel for a bf (and apparently, a detox program).
Another great update Astare! Well Brad may have messed up, but definitely have to give him credit for being straight forward with James about it. Also have to hand it to Gary for giving Brad the good advice of telling him to be truthful with James. Shows even further to his character and how good of a guy he is also. Maybe its just me, but I think it would make it that much harder and saddening for Brad to tell James when he showed up with flowers.
That is one heck of a cliffhanger by the way!
(haha but have to make sure to keep the reader wanting more, right?)
It's a good thing the film didn't get further than the cutting room floor. The production values were awful, and that version of the screenplay was the first draft. Now that there's much more depth to the story, the idea is once again viable. If money were no object... it would be done, and soon.
You and vater hit the nail on the head. As hard as it is not to do, we also can't judge Brad on just this one incident. But then again, we are only outside observers. James may or may not react the same way we do.
Yeah I know I am probably looking at the situation differently from this point of view rather than if it were me in either Brad or James places. It is easier to judge from this point of view.
I love the lines, "Honesty has worked in your favor thus far. I say stick with it." But then when Brad does this right thing and tells James, he over tells it, doesn't he? Didn't he share a BJ with Derek; he didn't "sleep" with him, did he? If he did, I missed the grunt and groan part. Now we find out how big of a saint James really is. Brad needs a forgiving archangel for a bf (and apparently, a detox program).
Yeah I also like how he tells James while drinking a lemon drop, further intake of alcohol that probably helped get him into this in the first place. Also I think the interpretation for "sleeping" with someone would probably be independent of the person. Personally if my boyfriend were to say that I would probably include even just a blow job as "sleeping" with someone, especially if he literally then did sleep with them. But that is me.
Got a bit behind LOL 2 parts & multiple replies since I last checked in...
Ooooh Brad might've really messed up. Looking forward to the next part...or maybe not LOL not sure I want to see James's response, will that be the end of their friendship/relationship??... Then what will Brad say/do?
<I can say if it was me in James's position, that would be the end. I'm glad I've never dated, so never had to deal with that situation >
I think the statement, "I slept with Derek." tells it all. James knows Derek and his ways, which may be a saving grace for Brad. He is intelligent enough to realize that Derek is a philanderer and probably set Brad up. That doesn't take the entire blame off Brad, but it may lessen the hurt.
I agree with Vater that Gary gave good advise and is to be commended for it. All we can do now is wait with bated breath for the jaw to come up from the floor and pronounce the verdict. I'm keeping my fingers crossed...............
Just wanted to let you guys know, I appreciate your comments after every part! It's very helpful to get feedback from readers, and it helps knowing people actually enjoy reading.
Part 30 is all proofed and ready to publish. It'll be here tomorrow morning. Don't die from anticipation!
I love the lines, "Honesty has worked in your favor thus far. I say stick with it." But then when Brad does this right thing and tells James, he over tells it, doesn't he? Didn't he share a BJ with Derek; he didn't "sleep" with him, did he? If he did, I missed the grunt and groan part. Now we find out how big of a saint James really is. Brad needs a forgiving archangel for a bf (and apparently, a detox program).
You're right: Brad and Derek did only blow each other; however, there are people out there that actually don't consider that sex. I guess it's just a matter of who you ask.
Brad does seem to be getting into a lot of trouble when going out to bars/dinner and alcohol is involved; however, he was in these same circumstances when he ran into James again. Alcohol can be a double-edged sword: great in moderation, but absolutely awful (and even deadly) when overdone. Brad may have to start watching his intake.
Another great update Astare! Well Brad may have messed up, but definitely have to give him credit for being straight forward with James about it. Also have to hand it to Gary for giving Brad the good advice of telling him to be truthful with James. Shows even further to his character and how good of a guy he is also. Maybe its just me, but I think it would make it that much harder and saddening for Brad to tell James when he showed up with flowers.
That is one heck of a cliffhanger by the way!
(haha but have to make sure to keep the reader wanting more, right?)
Yeah, money is pretty beneficial for that. It definitely has a good plot and has a lot of events to keep you interested.
Yeah I know I am probably looking at the situation differently from this point of view rather than if it were me in either Brad or James places. It is easier to judge from this point of view.
Yeah I also like how he tells James while drinking a lemon drop, further intake of alcohol that probably helped get him into this in the first place. Also I think the interpretation for "sleeping" with someone would probably be independent of the person. Personally if my boyfriend were to say that I would probably include even just a blow job as "sleeping" with someone, especially if he literally then did sleep with them. But that is me.
Thank you! I've found honesty up front can be best. Eventually the truth is gonna come out sooner or later, so I figure a person of character will take the brunt and admit their mistake, rather than take the risk of the person finding out on their own. It's worked for Brad in the past - all we can hope for is that it works again.
Sorry for the cliffhanger! I try not to do that too often, but this time I did it for good reason: to give the reader time to reflect and a chance to predict what James's reaction will be.
Got a bit behind LOL 2 parts & multiple replies since I last checked in...
Ooooh Brad might've really messed up. Looking forward to the next part...or maybe not LOL not sure I want to see James's response, will that be the end of their friendship/relationship??... Then what will Brad say/do?
<I can say if it was me in James's position, that would be the end. I'm glad I've never dated, so never had to deal with that situation >
Eh, two parts isn't that far to fall behind. Lord knows eventually I'll run behind on my writing again sooner or later. It's all good. As for what James will do, you'll find out as early as tomorrow. I kind of both love and hate knowing what's going to happen before everyone else; sure, I know the outcome, but I want to talk about it so much! Aah! I guess I can wait another day.
Craiger - The forum is being stupid and I'm having trouble quoting your post, but you and I talked about this elsewhere. Your thoughts are all level-headed. Perhaps James knows what kind of person Derek is and may be more understanding of Brad's confession. Perhaps not.
Thank you! I've found honesty up front can be best. Eventually the truth is gonna come out sooner or later, so I figure a person of character will take the brunt and admit their mistake, rather than take the risk of the person finding out on their own. It's worked for Brad in the past - all we can hope for is that it works again.
Sorry for the cliffhanger! I try not to do that too often, but this time I did it for good reason: to give the reader time to reflect and a chance to predict what James's reaction will be.
Honesty has proven to work well for Brad so far, so will have to see how James ends up reacting. He does know Derek and know how he is so maybe he will be understanding to the event. Maybe he won't. Just thought, I wonder if Derek will try something simila, as when he saw Brad and Eric at the deli, and try to tell James before Brad, however Brad already has. Will be intereesting to see how it all plays out.
I agree with you comment to Truxtun, alcohol has gotten him in trouble. But going for a drink by himself did lead him to James. So I can see how it can work both ways, but in moderation.
The cliffhanger has definitely been able to give us time to look at things and predict what will happen. I can see why you would want to set it up that way. Now just to find out how James reacts. Sadly I won't be able to check back in for a few days so I will have wait.
Thanks for the feedback, vater. I'm sad you won't be able to see the new part until after a few days. Hopefully the wait won't be too excruciating - or maybe I can get this part posted soon enough for you to catch it. Let's hope for the latter.
The wait is over!
Part 30
I wince, expecting James to explode into a jealousy-induced rage. The next few seconds pass tensely by, and then he says just about the last thing I expect him to say. "Damn, I wish I would've been here to join in!"
My facial expression goes from a wince to a look of sheer confusion.
He continues, "I guess I should've warned you that Derek can get a little slutty when he's drunk."
"A little?"
James laughs. "OK, maybe not a little."
I still have a look of confusion on my face. "Wait, so you're not mad?"
Now James has the look of confusion. "Mad? Why would I be mad?"
"Because I practically cheated on you while we were dating?"
James sets his drink down on the coffee table, stands up, and takes my hands in his.
"Brad, you didn't cheat on me. You haven't done anything wrong. In fact, I'm glad you got some action while I was away. That makes one of us, at least."
I can't believe what I'm hearing.
He goes on, "You and I never made a promise to be monogamous. I can't hold you to a promise that we never made in the first place."
I nod, and barely manage a "Uh huh."
"Speaking of dating, there's something I wanted to ask you."
I am so overwhelmed with relief that I can hardly bring myself to say, "What?"
"Well, obviously, I've had lots of time to myself to think, and I can safely say that I've never met anyone like you. You are truly one of the most honest people I've met. Your confession tonight, even though you did nothing wrong, just reaffirms that. And I love your outlook on life, your commitment to your work, and your loyalty to your friends. You're an all-around good guy. I'd like to be your boyfriend, and I would be honored if you wanted to be my boyfriend."
I'm speechless.
He continues, "There's something else."
I hesitate for a few seconds. "Yes?"
"Didn't you say that your lease for this place is up next month?"
"Yeah."
"Have you renewed it yet?"
"Not yet."
"Because I was also thinking, if we were to get together, I wouldn't want us living apart for another year. Instead of you renewing your lease, you could move in with me."
It's my turn to sit down. I am in such disbelief that sitting down is all I can do. I stare blankly at the wall.
After what seems like ages, James sits down on the couch beside me and wraps his arm around my shoulder.
A few seconds pass, then I speak up. "I was pretty sure after I told you about Derek that you would punch me, walk out, and never want to see me again."
James laughs. "Why do you always think I'm going to run away from you?"
"I would run. I would be so scared of getting hurt if someone I cared for basically spilled all of their faults to me. How can I be sure that person won't hurt me? How can you be sure I won't hurt you?"
James sighs. "I can never be completely sure. But that's the risk I have to take if I want to be happy."
I sit, contemplating for a few seconds, and James goes on, "As far as my proposition goes: I know it's a lot to take in all at once. If you're not ready to decide, by all means, take your time. There's certainly no rush."
"You're right about it being a lot to take in. I just don't know if I can commit to a relationship with all the things I'm doing at work right now."
"Don't sweat it. I can be a really patient person when I need to be, especially when it concerns someone so important to me."
I breathe a sigh of relief and rest my head against James's shoulder. He scratches my head for a little bit, then leans his head so that our eyes meet. "So, Derek must have shown you that little trick I taught him."
I snicker. "Yeah, he did."
A smile begins to form on his face. "Wanna head to the bedroom for a little practice session?"
I wasted no time in giving him a resounding "Yes!"
We stand up and make our way to the bedroom. We fall onto the bed, roll over to our sides, and face each other. Soon we are caressing and kissing each other all over - on the lips, ears, cheeks, and neck.
I reach my hand underneath his shirt and rub his chest, nipples, and torso. I grab the bottom of his shirt and raise it up, and he lifts his arms so I can pull his shirt off of him easily. He does the same to me. I then unbuckle his belt, undo the button to his pants, and slide his zipper down. I reach my hand inside his pants and grab his cock through his underwear. He lets out a moan of pleasure as we continue kissing. He eventually reaches down, undoes my pants, and slides them down, exposing my hard cock begging to escape from my briefs.
I get up and kneel in front of him as he slides to the foot of the bed and gets into a seated position. I yank my briefs down and push all my clothes the rest of the way off my body, and then grab the waistband of his briefs and pull them along with his pants to the floor. I push him down into a lying position and work my tongue on his inner thighs. I deeply inhale the scent of his manhood - a scent you can only get after sitting for hours in one position on an airplane. It is a sweet-smelling musk, mixed perfectly with James's natural scent. God, how I missed that scent!
I grab his cock with my hand, lick up and down the shaft, and then take all of him into my mouth. He lets out a sigh of pleasure. I start working my tongue all over his manhood, just like I had practiced with Derek the night before. It's apparently working, as James makes moans and gasps of ecstasy each time I change my tongue's technique.
I get up and lie on top of James, both of us completely naked. We kiss for a few seconds, and then James reaches around to my ass and begins massaging it. He pulls me forward, and I get on my knees and straddle him. He pulls me closer until my cock reaches his face. He envelops my cock with his mouth and goes to work on it with his tongue. As he works his magic, he holds my hips and pulls and pushes me forward and back, in and out of his mouth. I take the hint, grab the back of his head with my hand, and begin thrusting into his mouth. It amazes me how far I can thrust into his mouth without him gagging. I know I wouldn't be able to do what he's doing.
The sensation feels so wonderful, and I feel my orgasm getting closer. "Oh, James, I'm gonna cum, I'm gonna cum!"
James grabs my cock with his hand and furiously jerks me off while tonguing my balls. A few strands of jizz rip from my cock and land on his face, in his hair, and on the sheets behind him. He lets out his own moans of ecstasy as he jerks himself off to orgasm and begins shooting onto his torso. I collapse onto my back beside him, and when his spurts of cum subside, he rolls over and lies on top of me, his cum cementing our two bodies together.
We kiss for a few minutes. Our breathing has just about returned to normal. We run our hands up and down each other's body, then James scratches my hair while I caress his cheek.
After a few minutes, we stare into each other's eyes. This moment is perfect. Almost. It's only missing one thing.
"I love you, James."
He looks at me and gives me a comforting smile.
"I love you, too, Brad."
He leans his head down and our lips meet once again. We make out for what seems like hours, our hands sliding up and down one another's body. He wedges one hand underneath me, and in one swift motion, we roll over so that I rest on top of him. We continue making out and caressing each other.
Eventually James pulls away. "All that flying has certainly made me exhausted."
"Not to mention the sex."
He chuckles. "Yes, that too. How about we get some rest?"
"Yeah, sure."
We kiss for a few more seconds, then we pull the covers over us. We continue caressing each other for a little while, then I roll over and James pulls me into him and spoons me from behind. His cock, still hot and erect, pushes against my lower back. Our breathing becomes synchronized, and we eventually doze off to sleep.
Wow - AG, this story just keeps getting better and better. And in addition to a great story line, your technical writing quality is excellent. Thanks. James is a keeper, isn't he. All the more reason why I'm a bit puzzled by Brad's reaction to James' proposition. If a person to whom I profess love makes me a proposition like that, I wouldn't use my work load as an excuse to not give him an answer. I'd be packing my belongings and taking my vitamins with iron. It doesn't appear so but I hope James isn't too disappointed that Brad didn't give him an enthusiastic and immediate "yes," particularly following that mature, thoughtful, forgiving, and loving response to Brad's confession.
AG - does Brad give us a physical description of James and himself down the line? And I mean a full physical description that will satisfy the curiosity of a reader who appreciates the beauty of the male physique. I already have these images in my head and I have no idea if they come anywhere close to what Brad and James actually look like, but on the other hand, maybe that's how it's meant to be. Always looking forward to the next chapter.
Brad has to be one of the luckiest guys on the planet. James has again proven to be Mr. Right and Brad now has a decision to make in cementing this relationship. I think it wise not to jump into it without thoroughly examining it. James understands that and is willing to be as patient as necessary. Brad now has two new commitments to honor, his new job and his new found boyfriend. I'm sure Gary and Harry will be happy for him and support him fully. I also think Sharon will approve.
I have a feeling that Derek will some way try to interfere, possibly by telling James about the little tryst between he and Brad without knowing that James already knows. I may be wrong and shouldn't judge, but his personality up to this point has given me wonder. He is the one with less scruples. Thank goodness the cliffhanger is over for now...Thanks, AG.
Wow - AG, this story just keeps getting better and better. And in addition to a great story line, your technical writing quality is excellent. Thanks. James is a keeper, isn't he. All the more reason why I'm a bit puzzled by Brad's reaction to James' proposition. If a person to whom I profess love makes me a proposition like that, I wouldn't use my work load as an excuse to not give him an answer. I'd be packing my belongings and taking my vitamins with iron. It doesn't appear so but I hope James isn't too disappointed that Brad didn't give him an enthusiastic and immediate "yes," particularly following that mature, thoughtful, forgiving, and loving response to Brad's confession.
AG - does Brad give us a physical description of James and himself down the line? And I mean a full physical description that will satisfy the curiosity of a reader who appreciates the beauty of the male physique. I already have these images in my head and I have no idea if they come anywhere close to what Brad and James actually look like, but on the other hand, maybe that's how it's meant to be. Always looking forward to the next chapter.
Oh truxtun, I'm so glad you like this part! You seemed really pissed off at Brad a few parts earlier. I was like, "NOOO! He's not really that bad!"
Thanks for the positive comments about my writing. I take great care in my writing and making sure it's as error-free as possible. Some stuff does slip by, but I've gotten better at catching things here and there.
With Brad's hesitation, I think he's keeping James's feelings in mind. I've been in relationships (OK, one relationship) where my boyfriend and I both worked long hours and exhausting jobs. And right now I'm in a job that can somewhat be mentally taxing, and when I get home, sometimes I don't want to talk to or be around anyone. That kind of energy can be death for relationships. There may be nothing wrong compatibility wise - but if one person just don't have the energy and cannot devote any to the relationship, it falls apart quite easily. One person keeps longing for interaction and stimulation, and if the other person has no energy to provide it, the first person will start getting tired. I think Brad wants to be absolutely sure he CAN provide that for James before he actually enters into the relationship. Luckily James is very patient and understanding - at the moment. I'm sure if the situation were different, and Brad didn't have this huge project going on, he'd do exactly as you said and pack his belongings.
It's interesting you ask about James's physical appearance. As you indicated, I have intentionally left out a lot of physical details. Other readers and people I've talked to asked why I've left that out. My answer is that everyone, just like you, have formed images in their head as they read. Brad and James look just like what you want them to look like. True, some details are called for, such as ages. We know that Brad and James are in their late 20s (or if I haven't actually indicated James's age yet, just know late 20s is how old he is. I've given birthdays to both he and Brad). Other than age, everything else is left to the reader, because the reader knows what is considered attractive to them, and they can attribute those kinds of qualities to Brad and James (and even Stan and Derek).
Before I started writing the narrative/book (but way after I started the original screenplay) I came across an advice thread on the story forums that talked a lot about character development and detail. I'll copy the relevant parts of that post below:
(PS, if you're really wanting to know how *I* think they look, PM me and I'll send you links to some pictures.)
Thanks to those who have commented. We’ve got a great start on some technical tips, particularly grammatical.
Let’s talk about character development. Harding already broached this, so I wanted to add my two cents.
This is a tough topic because character development is deeply tied to the writer’s individual style and its effectiveness is subjective. All I can do is tell you what works for me, and admittedly, this is an area in which I struggle. My perspective is not the only one and my suggestions may not work for you, so take them for what they’re worth.
Much of my advice depends on whether you are writing porn with some story, or a story with some porn. Porn with some story is easy; throw some dirty words in there and you’ve got a quickie that’ll get some people excited (as long as you follow some of my initial tips). Story with some porn is much more difficult, and for the purpose of these comments, that’s what I’ll be discussing.
Along with Harding, I hate the dry exposition at the beginning of many stories. As he has suggested, a better idea is to launch right into the story. Leave detailed physical characteristics out of the description, unless there is a specific reason you want the reader to envision that particular trait. Otherwise, paint in broad strokes. This allows the reader to fill in the details with what -he- views as ideal. If the character is young, you might need to indicate that, since that will affect how the character interacts with the world. But don’t talk about the character’s amazing muscles (maybe the reader likes them slim) or the character’s stunning blue eyes (maybe the reader likes them brown) or the character’s humungous, veiny, thick, gorgeous, pre-cum-dripping , always-hard wondercock (maybe the reader likes them average – yes, there are some of us out there). Unless, of course, the wondercock is an important part of the character’s persona.
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Another way to describe a character is to discuss what one character sees in another. For example, for one of my stories, the reader knows that a secondary character has green eyes. The reason is that those eyes are one thing that draws the main character to him – a point of attraction. The main character also sees a deep inner strength in the secondary character and begins to fall for him because of it. I use the main character’s -perceptions- to -show- these traits rather than just saying, “Bill liked Frank’s green eyes.”
And to drive home the point, admit it: now that I’ve told you that the secondary character has green eyes and a deep inner strength, you’ve already begun constructing a mental image of him. That mental image is very attractive to you, but I guarantee he looks nothing like my mental image. When I come out and tell you that the secondary character has a rounded face, a goatee, defined abs, powerful arms, a great ass, dark brown hair, a thirty-two inch waist, is five feet eleven inches tall, and is wearing a t-shirt, slacks, and black tennis shoes, and has a mole on the inside of his left thigh, well, that’s all well and good for me… but he’s not half so attractive to you now, is he?
As much as you can, when it comes to physical characteristics, let the reader paint the picture. Give him a rough outline, but let him fill in the rest.
The other half of the character is his personality. There, you can take control. You have to. The character does things in your story, and you have to give him a personality that explains why he reacts the way he does to the world around him. Those reactions may be part of painting that personality, but ultimately, you need to demonstrate to the reader -who- the character is. Once again, don’t say, “He was mad all the time.” Show an incident where he kicks over a bucket in frustration.
Great chapter
Glad to read that James was ok with what went down (even tho I myself could never be). Maybe because Brad was honest about it? and/or because he knew how Derek is?
A guy like James would be a perfect find, so kind & understanding.
When I read this:
AstareGod said:
He continues, "I guess I should've warned you that Derek can get a little slutty when he's drunk."
"A little?"
James laughs. ...
I'm a bit puzzled by Brad's reaction to James' proposition. If a person to whom I profess love makes me a proposition like that, I wouldn't use my work load as an excuse to not give him an answer. I'd be packing my belongings and taking my vitamins with iron. It doesn't appear so but I hope James isn't too disappointed that Brad didn't give him an enthusiastic and immediate "yes," particularly following that mature, thoughtful, forgiving, and loving response to Brad's confession.
I don't know, but that type on reaction would totally be me (for reasons other than work load)
There'd be the shock/confusion from him asking,
but there's also the thing that I don't like or do well with change...
...Ofcourse it'd never get that far in the first place: because if someone was to merely ask me out (and do it in a non-jokeingly way) I'd probably die of shock right then and there LOL.LOL
You're right AG, I was royally pissed at Brad; still am, but I continue to like him just the same. After all, we get angrier at those we like and love, don't we? If I'm trying to develop a relationship with someone, monogamy becomes part of that relationship building and I'm not going to hide behind "the liquor did it." But Craiger's right on - James is the anchor in this affair and with Brad's volatility, it's going to be fun to watch Derek's fuckin around in their relationship.
Great chapter
Glad to read that James was ok with what went down (even tho I myself could never be). Maybe because Brad was honest about it? and/or because he knew how Derek is?
A guy like James would be a perfect find, so kind & understanding.
I'm a bit puzzled by Brad's reaction to James' proposition. If a person to whom I profess love makes me a proposition like that, I wouldn't use my work load as an excuse to not give him an answer. I'd be packing my belongings and taking my vitamins with iron. It doesn't appear so but I hope James isn't too disappointed that Brad didn't give him an enthusiastic and immediate "yes," particularly following that mature, thoughtful, forgiving, and loving response to Brad's confession.
I don't know, but that type on reaction would totally be me (for reasons other than work load)
There'd be the shock/confusion from him asking,
but there's also the thing that I don't like or do well with change...
...Ofcourse it'd never get that far in the first place: because if someone was to merely ask me out (and do it in a non-jokeingly way) I'd probably die of shock right then and there LOL.LOL
I guess all I can say is, everyone's different. It definitely is a huge change for Brad. He wants so much for it to happen, and that's even more reason to make sure if it does happen, it has a high chance of working out.
You're right AG, I was royally pissed at Brad; still am, but I continue to like him just the same. After all, we get angrier at those we like and love, don't we? If I'm trying to develop a relationship with someone, monogamy becomes part of that relationship building and I'm not going to hide behind "the liquor did it." But Craiger's right on - James is the anchor in this affair and with Brad's volatility, it's going to be fun to watch Derek's fuckin around in their relationship.
Brad has made some mistakes so far. Hopefully he's learned from them all. I can imagine after all the things he's been through the past few months, his head must be spinning like crazy. Hopefully he can take a breather and figure everything out.
I agree with Craiger that James is an anchor - Gary is another anchor in Brad's life, and has been for a long time. If it weren't for those two, who knows where Brad would be at this point.
I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far and hope that you continue to read it and comment. Thanks!
Astare, an amazing update and definitely worth the wait!
James really is a special guy he is an amazing and understanding guy. I can understand the hesitation Brad might have with not instantly saying yes to moving in with James. If I was in a similar situation I would have to think about it, I am in a similar situation with Brad as far as work and while I would love a relationship, not sure it would be the best time to start one, let alone move in with someone as well. That is definitley a big decision and something to think about. But you have to take a chance I guess, and James did say he is a patient guy especially if its for someone important to him.
Brad has to be one of the luckiest guys on the planet. James has again proven to be Mr. Right and Brad now has a decision to make in cementing this relationship. I think it wise not to jump into it without thoroughly examining it. James understands that and is willing to be as patient as necessary. Brad now has two new commitments to honor, his new job and his new found boyfriend. I'm sure Gary and Harry will be happy for him and support him fully. I also think Sharon will approve.
I have a feeling that Derek will some way try to interfere, possibly by telling James about the little tryst between he and Brad without knowing that James already knows. I may be wrong and shouldn't judge, but his personality up to this point has given me wonder. He is the one with less scruples. Thank goodness the cliffhanger is over for now...Thanks, AG.
Craiger I was thinking the same thing about Derek. I was wondering what he was going to do with this situation. Based on what we have seen I could see him trying to go to James to tell him what Brad and him had done, not knowing Brad already told him. Looking forward to how this starts to play out.
It's interesting you ask about James's physical appearance. As you indicated, I have intentionally left out a lot of physical details. Other readers and people I've talked to asked why I've left that out. My answer is that everyone, just like you, have formed images in their head as they read. Brad and James look just like what you want them to look like. True, some details are called for, such as ages. We know that Brad and James are in their late 20s (or if I haven't actually indicated James's age yet, just know late 20s is how old he is. I've given birthdays to both he and Brad). Other than age, everything else is left to the reader, because the reader knows what is considered attractive to them, and they can attribute those kinds of qualities to Brad and James (and even Stan and Derek).
Before I started writing the narrative/book (but way after I started the original screenplay) I came across an advice thread on the story forums that talked a lot about character development and detail. I'll copy the relevant parts of that post below:
(PS, if you're really wanting to know how *I* think they look, PM me and I'll send you links to some pictures.)
Interesting I hadnt thought about intentionally leaving the details of the characters appearances, open for interpretation. I know I have created my thoughts on what they look like. I like the thought process behind that. I think that can allow the reader to make the story more personal, because like you mentioned they can create the characters apearance to fit what they find attractive.
That is more than a drink. James is pretty understanding of a lot of things, but I think that is a lot to be understanding of. Nice update Astare, definitely keeping it interesting and wanting more. Anxiously awaiting to see what the morning brings for Brad when he wakes up. Also I like the music to go along with the parts it is a nice touch while reading, especially knowing they are in a bar.
2 parts & multiple replies since I last checked in...
