Best Buddies Play Hard

[hungbuzz]

this story brings a tear to my eye every time i read it! thank you Neil


Mikko

 

[King08]

The ending messed the story up for me. I can't stand sad endings and that got to me. (I almost cried.) Don't get me wrong it was still a great story. One of the best I've read. It makes me wish I can write because so many different endings popped in my head.

 

[gsdx]

The ending messed the story up for me. I can't stand sad endings and that got to me.

I'm not particularly keen on sad endings, either, but the way the story was going (I had no idea what was going to happen beyond the 'lake' scene), there was no other way for this story to end. It was actually a happy ending, though, if you think about it. Kevin's life had been crap and he lived for only one thing. When it was fulfilled, his life was complete and he finally did what he had decided he would do a long time ago.

 

[AdmiraalW238]

I'm not particularly keen on sad endings, either, but the way the story was going (I had no idea what was going to happen beyond the 'lake' scene), there was no other way for this story to end. It was actually a happy ending, though, if you think about it. Kevin's life had been crap and he lived for only one thing. When it was fulfilled, his life was complete and he finally did what he had decided he would do a long time ago.

I have just found this story and I am in such a quandry that I hardly know where to start.

Off the bat, this is once again an extremely well written story, as usual.

It has everything and it drags you in but in a good way. Reading one chapter compels you to continue reading which is the way a story should be written.

As I continued to read this wonderful story I could where it would end before I even got there and have to admit that I shed more than a few tears and it is rare for me to shed a tear at a story.

The final piece between Kevin and Marty showed incredible love and tenderness which is what made this an incredible story.

All I can say is thank you for writing such a wonderful story. This is definitely one that should be published in an anthology of your short stories.

 

[belgarion63]

I have heard this story mentioned in other threads, but nothing could have prepared me for the raw emotion that you captured in it...i cried for three hours after reading this...and it is made even more sad when you know that we live in a world where this sort of thing actually happens to people...
Wonderfully written as always Neil.

 

[alexchaidez]

this was beautiful. Honestly it was so real and bittersweet i wanted to just cry. This is definetly not a run-of-the-mill story, you have real talent. Thanks

 

[gsdx]

Again, thank you all for your wonderful comments and PMs. They are greatly appreciated and mean a lot to me.

Here is a list of my other stories posted at JUB: http://www.justusboys.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107877

I hope you enjoy them as much as you enjoyed this one.

Take care, always.
Neil

 

[khushibagh]

That was an amazingly well written and extremely moving story. I was gutted by the ending though. I will definitely check out more of your stuff.

 

[antonk8]

are you working on any other new stuff other then the ones you are currently working on...id be really interested to have a read

 

[gsdx]

are you working on any other new stuff other then the ones you are currently working on...

No, sorry. At the moment, circumstances barely allow me to handle my current projects.

 

[bmark_packard]

Neal,
I have read a number of your stories and have loved each one. How do you do it? This one as usual was great. I was teary eyed at the end, sad for Kevin. You know we want more. Maybe i will find one that I have not read then again maybe I will just read Watching Brad again.
Thanks!

 

[antonk8]

understandabe, hope you can get restarted soon...but keep your circumstances as the priority..l

 

[emusarecool]

omg i hate you !
god i'm cry so bad. when i read that we was gone iwas mad but then when you
started with the part with him killing him self my heart just sank why do you do that


p.s i don't really hate you how could i hate the guy that gave me watching brad and takeing care of jason

p.p.s going to go read the re write of this now sleep can wait i want to read this story with a diff ending

 

[Bodhi1]

Wonderful writing, great realism ... Of course in my time I have seen this happen. I would like to say NEVER AGAIN!

We need to be there for our young ... and your stories and compassion are a beacon for questioning kids. Kudos!!!

 

[homemadehuman]

what a powerful and moving story...i would lie if i said i didn't have tears falling down my face by the 2nd half,not even knowing the end..but because of the way you wrote kevin..i loved how you managed to make him so innocent and yet so twisted because of his experiences..and how marty understood that he wasn't aware of his own behavior because it was all he grew to..

i have met people exposed to such experiences,and you played it brilliantly.

two things i don't understand are:

1.in the first chapter,you actually said that Kevin had blue eyes,and in the 2nd one..you said he had brown eyes.

2. one of the most remarkable phrases of the story was: i wish we were fourteen again..as kevin said remembering the times he spent with Marty at the pond...

But..you contradicted yourself later by stating that Marty didn't see Kevin again since his father took him away at TWELVE. and that he didn't see him til they were eighteen,besides that,it was PERFECT.

i wish everybody read this,not only us jubbers .

 

[gsdx]

two things i don't understand are:

1.in the first chapter,you actually said that Kevin had blue eyes,and in the 2nd one..you said he had brown eyes.

2. one of the most remarkable phrases of the story was: i wish we were fourteen again..as kevin said remembering the times he spent with Marty at the pond...

But..you contradicted yourself later by stating that Marty didn't see Kevin again since his father took him away at TWELVE. and that he didn't see him til they were eighteen,besides that,it was PERFECT.

Good catches. I hadn't even noticed.

In the first instance, there was a month between writing chapters 1 and 2. I don't keep notes. Sometimes I forget and screw up.

In the second instance, see the last part of the first instance.

In all honesty, I rarely plan stories. I don't make outlines. I rarely know how a story is going to end until it gets there.

Things happen, but thank you for being so observant.

 

[homemadehuman]

Good catches. I hadn't even noticed.

In the first instance, there was a month between writing chapters 1 and 2. I don't keep notes. Sometimes I forget and screw up.

In the second instance, see the last part of the first instance.

In all honesty, I rarely plan stories. I don't make outlines. I rarely know how a story is going to end until it gets there.

Things happen, but thank you for being so observant.

Thank you so much for replying me! i really admire your writing,and by mentioning those 2 things i noticed,i don't want you to think that i am criticizing,i just wanted to you to know that i was so drawned into the story and amazed by it that i noticed lol,really..i know you have read it like million times before,but i thank you from the heart for your writing. i love to rea about human experiences and life travels because it's all emotional, and emotions are what keep me ( us) alive.

i would love to be your friend,i would be honoured actually.

 

[gsdx]

i know you have read it like million times before

If you wish to know the truth, the only time I read my stories it is when I proofread each chapter before posting it. I have yet to read any of my stories all the way through as a story.

(Which would explain the eye colour and age mistakes I made.)

 

[dylanwhite82]

I hope the fuckin trailer burns down with those two mother fuckers in it.

 

[lycanchub13]

Tears cling to my eyes as I write this. A person would be lucky to have someone that loved them as much as Kevin loved Marty. I feel for both characters, and I can relate to this story. I had lost my closest friend, a few years ago, and he was the only man I truly ever loved. Thank you for writing this story.